📕 subnode [[@flancian/2022 10 30]] in 📚 node [[2022-10-30]]
📓 garden/flancian/journal/2022-10-30.md by @flancian ️👁 ️📝
  • [[30]]
    • Thinking about the transition from October to November and the transition from Julian to Gregorian calendar affecting dates related to the [[Russian Revolution]] of October/November 1917.
    • This also caused by my recently having started to read [[China Mieville]]'s book on the revolution :)
  • [[agora]]
    • #push [[agora chapter]] deadline today, let's see how far I get! today I hope to start early and finish late.
      • General [[patterns]] identified by the editors
        • #G1 too many links / links which aren't explicitly wikilinks
          • Strategy: cut links by 50%, add back [[wikilink markers]] for all remaining links (makes me "pay for them" in a way)
        • #G2 should address the reader of the book more than the user of an Agora
        • #G3 lacking information on similar initiatives/prior work
        • #G4 should be less of a manifesto and more a concrete description of the system that integrates PKGs
        • #G5 lacks cohesion, add transitional paragraphs
        • #G6 repetition
        • #G7 Agora discussed as having agency (might be OK, but might also be confusing)
        • #G8 use of bullet points which should be written as long form text
  • #push [[flancia]]
  • working on [[agora chapter]] tonight
    • did four pomodoros already, got a bit sidetracked but not too much I believe. trying to improve cohesion.
    • still need to get rid of many bullet points sections, but the good thing about working on narrative first (beginning to some point) is that some of those bullet point lists might not be necessary.
    • Moving anything that feels like it doesn't belong in this first published document (if it gets published) to [[agora chapter 2]] -- a sort of scratch space :)
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